Here's what I think is wrong with the sentences above:
1. The word unlike contrasts "bigger festival" with the subject of the sentence, "a lot of Biguenos". What the writer wanted to say was that a lot of Biguenos feel a deeper attachment to one festival than to another festival. What her sentence actually says is that the Vigan City Fiesta feels an attachment to the Viva Vigan Festival, but the Biguenos feel an attachment deeper than that--which is absurd.
The sentence actually suffers from a comparison-contrast mix-up. The items being compared are the levels of attachment felt by the Biguenos toward the two festivals: what they feel for one is deeper than what they feel for the other. However, by using unlike, the writer also contrasted the festival from the Biguenos, which doesn't make sense.
2. There should have been a comma after "Vigan City Fiesta," to set off the phrase "held every January".
3. There is a pronoun-antecedent error in the second sentence. The subject of the sentence is the celebration, but the pronoun that refers to it is the plural personal pronoun, their. The pronoun has no proper antecedent. To fix the sentence, we can rewrite it as follows:
Considered the fiesta of the city's nine poblacions or barangays, the celebration is more than a chance for the Biguenos to get in touch with their very own culture....
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